If pressed I could probably come up with a sandwich worse than the one Mandy orders. there’s nothing particular that is wrong about any of the ingredients, but they certainly don’t belong together. There might be some far-flung Thanksgiving dish that employs both mushroom and raisins out there, but you lost me at Thanksgiving.
This is still all very first-episode clunky. Todd is an exposition sounding board. The fact that Marty has not brought up this obsession with Mandy to him prior to this doesn’t work very well, but we have to get our information about what is happening with the main character somewhere.
With Marty every situation is immediately intense. To him, every action has an equal but opposite overreaction. I think I may have actually used those words to describe him in some of the notes and other materials I had while fleshing this out.
